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It started with a kind word,
Evolved into a meaningful look,
Reached the point of a kiss
Love was born

Two souls that would forever be intertwined
Their lives spent together, nothing coming between them
Nothing was thought to be able to separate them
Not even the pain of death

They lived together, never seeming to fight
Never seeming bothered by much
They just lived
And loved

No one could have imagained what came next
They seemed so happy
So healthy and safe
No one could predict or prepair for this

The results came back and word quickly spread
None thought this posable, none expected something this bad
How could this happen to someone so happy
So good and right?

This isn't fair, it isn't right.
That was the common responce
They didn't deserve this, neither deserved to die
While people far worse lived

What was the cause?
How could there be no cure?
How could one live
After the other dies?

They know, one can't survive without the other
Yet they must, one cannot rest in peace if the other does not go on
How can this happen,
To someone so young, so full of life?

The time grew closer with each passing day
The time of separation, and despair
When this pair of souls that had always been together
Would for the first time be apart

As that final day grows closer the days before grow colder
And find themselves filled with tears
Both know that neither will ever share again
What they've shared with each other

When the day arives, and despite the best efforts
One is snatched away from the other
There is nothing but sadness
Nothing but pain

How could someone be expected to burry
Someone so close to them
So important to them?
Everyone cries, exept the surviver

The one who lives does not shed a single tear
Is it because they are heartless?
Because they no longer care?
Or is it because they to have died inside?

No,
The reason the tears are not streaming
Down the face of the one who just burried their soulmate
Is simple, and plain

They know their love will live on
Even after they are separated
They will never truly be apart
The barrier of death may have inserted itself between them
But their hearts, and minds, will always be together
©2007-2009 *CelestialJade121
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Theme #55: Separation

My boyfriend challenged me to write a love poem for the theme of Separation and this is what I came up with :).
I personally like it a lot. Even though it is kind of sad.

I tried to leave it up to the reader to decide who the couple are, be them a married couple, or just some people who are dating, or even family members. I also tried to let you decide which one dies. I would be very interested to hear what other people think on this as far as who they are and which one dies and how

I personally think of it as about a young married couple in which the wife dies of cancer.

Well let me know what you think, I always enjoy hearing how people interpret my art :).

Oh and due to my laziness I again did not spell check so if you see any errors please let me know. Thanks :peace:
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Well, i'm glad you posted this in my forum, I absolutely love it. :heart:
My interpretation? Well, i agree with your idea that the person dies by an illness similar to cancer, but i imagine them to be a couple who have been together for so long, that no matter what happens they will always be together in heart and spirit, even in death as you say :nod:

A beautiful poem, and one I'll happily read again ^_^ :+fav:

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Thank you so much :) I'm very glad you like it, I was kind of trying a new style with this one and am very glad that it came out good :)
Again thank you so much for the nice comment and the fave it's very much appritiated :hug:

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Well, your new style is definitely very effective!

You're welcome, it deserved it :)

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Thank you :)

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This is beautiful, and your writing style and voice was settle yet sad in a way. I loved the sound of your voice because you clearly were able to represent such feelings. :+fav:
Thank you very much for the comment and fave :)

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